Be Excellent To Each Other

I'm crap at writing, creatively or otherwise.
But! I wrote all about my first competition in my Tomcat, and now a (free, but well-read) magazine would like to run it.
So, er, if anyone could cast an eye over it and show me where it could be improved, that'd be great.

Ahem.

http://www.manracing.co.uk/blog/wordpress/?p=36

I don't mind taking a look if you want to e-mail it over sharpish.

It'll be on the laptop then before I leave work for the day.

EDIT: Ah, you've linked it.

Meh, good read, leave it like that.

Enjoyed that. Is the magazine Car based? Because if not it might be worth explaining what 'punch' means.

(I don't know what it means)

Yeah, it's 4x4 competition based, so I don't have to worry about the terminology.

OOI, a punch is a hole punch with a pattern, tied to a tree. You have to drive your car near enough to put a hole in your scorecard (which is tied to your car) with the punch to get some points.

Why do they call it man racing?

Also, pic of punch card pls.

Don't have a pic, sorry. It's just a bit of laminated paper with lots (36) of numbered boxes, and you have to punch the right number with the right punch.
My team is called MAN Racing, because we are Matt And Nase.

Ah, I thought it was the name of the type of event! I guess that'll be clear to your intended audience though.

Oooh. Cool. Thanks.

PM'd. Post it all here if you want and others can add/subtract to it of you want.

I'd like to say that you do yourself down by saying that you can't write, sir. it was pretty good I reckon.

I have a better idea. Hang on.

https://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AZ1g ... YmZn&hl=en

Edit free-for-all - probably best if you choose a colour.

Sorry Mali, I left your changes out to get the photos (and captions) in. Do you want me to put them in?

It's your piece, man. Knock yourself out.

That is, I'm not worried either way. happy to aid and a bet.

If you want, i'll jsut copy pasta it here. or whatever.

I think i broke editing, sorry.

Reads good. Check the goal numbering, though.

Is it like orienteering with cars then?

I enjoyed reading that. Thanks, Grim... .

Good pictures too.

That's exactly what it is.